Just some constructive criticism
For when the chords come in, either make the main melody louder, or silent the chords a little bit. You want to keep that piano dominant. Just some real basic technical shit, but the rest is alright. I guess if you're making this for someone, you can't do too many change ups-- 'cause it does sound a bit plain.
One last thing! That final flute note throws me off, maybe fade it out, or cut it a second sooner.
Other than that, good job! Keep it up
Whoa.
I'm not any good at giving Trance reviews, but I'll post my responses.
0:00 - :D
0:15 - Oh yeaah, I'm feelin' it.
0:27 - These vocal edits are legit.
0:42 - Kinda feels odd without any more really notable effects - 1:07
1:08 - :D
1:37 - The build up is about to begin.
1:53 - It's happening.
2:18 - Can't tell if it happened yet?
2:25 - No, probably not.
2:32 - Definitely not :D:D:D
2:44 - ITS HAPPENINGG!!!!!!!
2:47 - Breaks out in dance - 3:52
It has it's iffyz, but it's still epic. Amazing!
Give me a second here...
oooh,, oh yeahh. oh.. yeaah--
Aaaaaaaaahhh.
nice.
hey dawg, my music page aint the place to be fartin
Whaaaaaat, this is epic!
My one and only problem with this, is right at 0:49.
It seems like the melody started an instant too soon?
Or it's just me.
Great job though! Keep it up :)
i dont think so :D Meh it is hardly noticeable anyway, i am pretty sure it is on time :D
LOOK EVRY1 I'M DANCING
WooooOoOoOoOoo!!!
I love it, just set the levels lower, the louuud is killin quality.
Everything is right,
However! Your synths just need to be a tad sharper. The high pitched chip isn't displayed, and that's what brings the nostalgia! Y'know what I mean?
Great stuff though :) Keep it up.
Moar 8-bit?
Legit.
The lyrics are tight, except it would sound tighter if there was more change up with the track. Instead just breaking the distorted notes up, maybe more accidentals when the rhyme schemes switch up.
Just my opinion. Other than that, it's legit.
.. and maybe a break down when you do the intro to 'round 2'
Don't think it's done yet, eh...
Sounds like you need a hottie with a hook. Y'know, some fire on the side.
But the composition is legit. I can't think of what you'd be looking for.
It's hard to work with piano this delicate. It's a lot easier to ruin everything, than help it a little bit. Maybe a oooh here, and aaahh there. But, it's all good. Keep it up.
thanks yo
Bombtingoringo
Oh Girl,
I know you're playing with me.
Oh girl, I know you playin with me,
But I never know why you stayin with me. Layin wit me,
stuntin all these games.
I like playin 'em when cravin' em.
But it's just a pest like something left behind.
I try to keep it slow, but you're fuckin with my mind
So I kick it overdrive, and you tell me get in line.
So I stand up straight, but you push me on my side.
Grabbing on my dick, but then say it's not the time.
Shit...
Oh Girl
I know you're playing with me.
... Oh right, a review. Uh. From the beginning with the rapid bops to the tings and the tangs, and then the tickity ticks, to the synth hops, then CUT! Slow that shit down, start hummin oh girl to the suttle violin. But freeze, we bring out the gangsta raps when the poppin synths come back. Repeat that humm, and embrace the killer outro. I don't know how you do it, but keep fucking doing it.
So happy this was on audio home page.
Originally I was going to vote on what the hip hop page has to offer,
then I see "I Know Your Body", so I thought /ooh do you now/
And omg. The ticks at the beginning caught my attention right away, but at 00:40 when that synth comes in. Oh man. At first I was skeptical about the high synth at 00:52 but the second bar accompanied by the piano completely changed my mind. It was beautiful.
And don't even get me started on that breakdown at 1:43 Ahahahaha that was fucking epic. but at 1:57 on, that little solo.. still kinda iffy about it-- So that explains the 9.
Great job though, keep it up :D
Halp!
Age 32, Male
Lyricist
Toronto, ON
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